…For an end-term assignment in AP English. The bummer part about it is we have to point out EVERY word in the story, whether it’s a verb, article, modifier, etc.
It’s a war/love story, but I’ve made it a point to make sure it doesn’t suck. Once upon a time, there’s three countries at war with one another, (Arnania, Baschland, and Khaled; it’s fictional) and an Arnanian spy (female) is helled captive by Khaled (the country she spied on), and a Baschland mercenary unit is recruited to seize her and they’re being paid top dollar for her arrest. Their intention is to take her back to their home country to discover information about Khaled, and then to put her on trail for execution. The mercenary unit (Company Sierra Delta) splits up, and 1st Lietenant Ethan North is the one to find her.
On their way back, he makes it a point of concealing his intentions and they accidentally fall in love. Instead of cuddling, they huddle together to keep one another warm in the north,…
instead of cooking one another meals, they show one another how to hunt for food, etc.
Now, here’s the twist. In the end, the mercenary turns her over his country for interrogation. And the story is coming to a head. I’m not sure if I should end it there and leave my "readers" hanging, or should I have him rescue her in a fit of guilt?
Like I said, critics welcome.
I think it’s good. I also think you should add a little bit more depth….make things just a little bit more twisted……..
Example:
What is the reason for this giant war? Is one of the countries holding a grudge or some kind of secret? If North returns in a fit of guilt, did he have something to hide that he wasn’t sharing before? Stuff like that. Good job!
February 15th, 2010 at 11:25 am
I think it’s good. I also think you should add a little bit more depth….make things just a little bit more twisted……..
Example:
What is the reason for this giant war? Is one of the countries holding a grudge or some kind of secret? If North returns in a fit of guilt, did he have something to hide that he wasn’t sharing before? Stuff like that. Good job!
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