Calling all CRITICS and WRITERS!!! How’s this part of my story? HONEST ANSWERS NEEDED.?

Posted by admin on June 14th, 2010 and filed under story critics | 1 Comment »

PLEASE tell me your HONEST opinions. Please feel free to criticize on my writing.

Here’s the link: http://hubpages.com/hub/Different-is-Special

I’m thirteen and I really want to be a writer. I guess I spend most of my time writing this and reading. The story in that link is about fifteen year old Yamileth, short for Yami. When her mom marries Jeff, he starts to use her and make her do everything he wants. Jeff wants Yami out of his way so he sends her to Boarding School. Yami walks through the woods to go to Bufflen (Boarding School). She meets an old man and he tells her there’s no school like that. Instead he says that there is a school called "House Of Scourer’s."

It’s basically a school of wizards and magic. There is four powers that you can be gifted with, Water, Earth, Air and Fire. Yami was different, she got to be gifted with the power of being able to Read minds, read auras, see someones life from start to finish by a touch. She was a Light and Darkness wizard. The rest is for you to read!

i read it your a great writer. I have no interest whatsoever in what it is you write about yet i think its great. Bravo.

One Response

  1. Love Says:

    i read it your a great writer. I have no interest whatsoever in what it is you write about yet i think its great. Bravo.
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